I sat on the edge of the solid, freezing pavement. With a depressed look on my filthy face. All around me was rubble. What had been my home was now demolished into thousands of individual pieces. I couldn’t recognise anything now. All around me were smouldering fires that were instantaneously spreading. Destroying even more. The dancing fires were hissing and spitting. With every short, sharp breath that I took, I inhaled smoke. I was frozen to the bone but unfortunately we didn’t have any shelter. My shoulders were hunched and my hands were pulled tight into my chest to try to generate heat. I rubbed my hands together so furiously that I expected sparks. Suddenly, all was silent. Unhurriedly, I looked up into the bleak sky. A cumbersome bomb was descending from the dull, grey sky. BANG! Then everything went pitch black…
What a super piece of writing, Meg. You have certainly used your VCOP skills to make sure any reader would feel like they understand your situation and feelings. Well done.
Fantastic writing. Well done.