In the town of Blobville there was a boy called Tom. He was very quite and really TINY. He had no friends because he was the only kid in the town. One day there was a big bomb that EXPLODED in the heart of the city and it was a stink bomb and it was so smelly that it felt like thousands of sKunks had taken over the city and their lair was in the in city. There was GREEN goo all over the walls there was pieces of PIANO all over the floor. Then Tom came from behind and said SORRY.
By Ewan
Well done, Ewan, very interesting!
You paint a picture of a very strange town; not sure I’d like to be there with that mess and smell around.
A good, imaginative piece written in clear sentences.
Mr B in Essex
Ewan – I LOVE your story! It shows great imagination and I love your use of the word ‘lair.’ Good use of short sentences and your descriptions are very good – I can almost smell the stink bomb… Ew! This is an excellent story and I really enjoyed reading it. Well done!