Some of pupils entered the Veolia Poetry Competition about looking after the planet. Congratulations to Ola who won the competition! Amazing news and fantastic feedback.
Other children who entered the competition had fantastic feedback too! Well done to everyone who entered!
P5 – Connor – This was so close to being our winner, because of the fantastic words used in rhyming, the great local knowledge of the ‘gardyloo’, and the powerful message of ‘one planet-one Scotland’ which captures the global action needed to combat climate change.
P4 – Finlay –Â Loved how this poem had such a direct call to action- to mobilise people and that it used fantastic repetition. We hope people will do exactly as Finlay asks.
P4 – Jack – This was one of the most original poem entries we had. We loved how Jack managed to make a coral reef sound even more amazing, buy using the whole poem as a metaphor for baking a cake (at least we though cake- others may have thought of other food). It made all of the colours in a reef stand out in out imaginations even more.
P4 – Ruby – This poem had great rhyming and we really liked how Ruby, made us think of the Ocean as a home, rather than just a big pool of water for animals in it. It made the reader even more keen to protect it.
P4 – Sophie Rose –The descriptive language in this poem was the best we have seen from any of our entries. It was so good, it didn’t need the pictures. The language made you imagine all of these horrible scenes happening to Sloths and their environments and really made the reader feel how powerless they are without our support. This poem was also one of the saddest we received. This is not a criticism, it is just testament to well Sophie Rose described a very sad situation.
P4 – Sorley – We loved how Sorley, spelt the word environment using each line of the poem, and we loved how the T at the end was a message that working together we can solve this issue. Sorley also showed great knowledge from renewable energy to melting ice caps.
P4 – Anastacia – We liked that this poem had great use of rhyming. We also really liked the simile about polar bears, and the metaphor about polar bears needing ice to fight climate change. There was a good use of onomatopoeia. We found this a powerful poem.
