February 27, 2013
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Up Helly Aa

On Thursday 21st of February da Jarl Squad came to wir school. They came and sang, let wis try on their helmets and shields. Da shields had a sun and a metal bit in da middle. They had a dragon on their tops. Da jarl dis year was Michael Nisbet, da Jarl last year was Graham Hughson and da jarl next year will be David Spence. They gave wis chocolate eggs. My highlight wis their singing and when they gave us da cream eggs. Here’s a photo of me we da helmet and shield.

February 21, 2013
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Cullivoe Jarl Squad visit Burravoe School

This weekend is Cullivoe Up Helly Aa (fire festival); we were really pleased that the Jarl started his celebration with a visit to us. Everyone had great fun trying on the helmets and reindeer cloaks and wielding the axes! Thanks to Mia for some great filming. We’ll post some more pictures next week.

February 20, 2013
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The Mysterious key

Once there was a key that was rusty and frozen on the cold grass. There was a boy that walked slowly and saw a key. He had a power to melt it. When he melted it he picked it up it was glistening. Then he walked slowly to the jewels shop. Hi said the boy can you help me find how dropped this key said the boy. Ok said the man give it to the girl on the other side of the street said the man ok said the boy. Then the key went in a big shiny glow oh no said the boy he went on a big adventure. They where a girl standing in the shop. It was a glistening shiny shop it was very posh. Hi said the girl hi said the boy can you help me find how dropped this key the boy. It looks like a monster said the girl oh said the boy.

I like the cold grass in your story Leah. The with the hi bit you will need a capital H and you spall dropped. MA I have now sorted it.

February 20, 2013
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The magic key

They were a boy who was playing in the freezing cold garden he tripped on a key the key was very rusty but I still pick it up . He holed it but then it started to turn in to gold be for you now it you were in a kingdom’s castle it was so attractive. They were a man holding a super shiny diamond I was holding a sword he said I will give you a diamond if you give me a enchanted sword. I said I don’t have an enchanted sword but I do have an stone sword the man said I have an enchanted table you cane enchanted you sword. Folly me I will show you summing lock at my enchanted amour it is so perish don’t touch it the end. But that was my turn to say that was the end.

February 20, 2013
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Jack Frost

There was a man. He was a mysterious man, and no one knew who and what he was. He dropped the glistening key on the frozen ground and strolled happily and strangely away. There it sat miserably for years, decades, centuries and then one day a caring man in winter called Toby skipped along enthusiastically. He was all raped up warm with his winter jacket and woolly mittens. He stared at the ancient key and then straight away picked it up and put it in his cosy jacket pocket silently. Then he took the key home. His room was immaculate. It was like a huge lab in one room. He put the key quickly down on a padded table and then moved the key to a massive door with a lock. He put the key through it and it opened. Outside the door was to the man’s surprise it looked like a fairytale land with candy floss trees, chocolate paths and mint leaf grass which looked like frost. Then the man looked ferocious and he turned all white and his hair was all frosty, HE WAS JACK FROST.

I like your story; I think you have described the mysterious man. Is the mysterious man Jack Frost? Was the big door in his room? I think you have used the thesaurus very well and some of the words were quite amazing.

Charlotte

The Mysterious man is a different guy but what do you think? Thanks

Mia

February 20, 2013
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The Magical Key

In the night I was walking quickly in the fields. Then I went outside in the morning then I saw a mysterious key in the field. Then I sat down and I feel the key it was rusty then the key floated in the air then I tried to get it but the key flew to the left then I tried to grabbed it then the key is turned into a sword. Then I ran fast then my mum came then the sword went back to a key.

February 20, 2013
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The Key

One day I was walking slowly in the woods when I saw something glistening in the sunlight so I stumbled up to it trembling with fear because it was going to bring me bad luck, but it didn’t, instead a mysterious door appeared then I released where ever I went with key I just had to drop it on the grass and the magic door would appear and I could peer through. One night I decided to pack some things for my unbelievable journey then I tiptoed down the stairs being cautious not to wake my snoozing parents. When I got outside I dropped the key on the rocksoild ground the door appeared yet again so I stepped inside it was like a palace it had my name and pictures of me all over the isolated walls so I had a look around and then it hit me I remembered mum on the phone to someone talking about selling the house this is my home aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh oh I’m sorry I’m just really excited sorry got to go.

By Kerry

I saw you had a mixture of past tense and present tense. I didn’t get the bad luck part so maybe you need to look that through again!

Apart from that your work is good and I can see you have been using the thesaurus and I like the word glistening. Try using more grammar. Fae Mia

Thanks Mia I fixed what you told me to fix, next time I will use more grammar in my work Thanks for commenting

Fae Kerry

February 20, 2013
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The Magic Key

Once a girl called Lily and her dog were playing in the garden until… Lily saw a mysterious glistening key that twinkled. O Help me a magic key help MUM! What is it a silly glimmering key that lights up said mum. But but but it twinkled in the sun light said Lily. Its probably a dream anyway its bed time tell me about that silly key tomorrow said mum. Yes I finally can get to tell her the story about the key that I have been desperate to tell her. Just up to sunrise the key starts to glow oh no! Where am I…..

February 20, 2013
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Yorkshire Dales and the Mysterious Key

It was a cold day outside in the Yorkshire Dales. “Mum I am going to the park!” called Molly Sutherland. “Well if you are going to skate on the frozen pond then you must put your helmet and ice skates on!” Answered Mrs Sutherland. After Molly put her helmet and skates in an old Tesco’s bag she walking slowly through the door and entered the garden which was covered with glistening snow. When Molly was making her way through the snow she saw a key lying on her swing which swung slowly. She picked up the chestnut colored key which shone in the light. She skipped through the snow briskly. “Mum, Mum!” “Look what I found!”Shouted Molly. “What an earth is it? her mother. As Molly walked briskly into kitchen and showed her mother the key which looked as clear as a new car. “What a lovely key, where on earth did you find it?” “In the garden!” exclaimed Molly. The key started to glow, and soon it was whirling around them. “Molly what have you done now!”…………….

What did you think?

February 20, 2013
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100wc

A girl and a boy found a magic key they. It was on the ground. The key was sparkly the girl and the boy thought it was mysterious and it was Frozen. The girl and the boy took the key home. The girl had a money box she had lost the key for her money box the girl and the boy ran up to her room they put the key in the key hole and the money box opened and the money box took them too a magical world with lollypops and then it was time to go home.

February 15, 2013
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Lions By Phoebe

Lion

Hi I am Steve the lion the cub and I very cute.

I want to be a powerful king when I am big.

I like to be annoying and run wild. Sometimes I can be very smart. My Dad says that I am strong but I not I wish I was though. I a sleepy. I would like to be flexible. When I shake my fur it goes all fluffy. My dad says I am fierce.

February 15, 2013
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Dream

The bare and grey trees suddenly look big to the little log house which sat on the snowy ground. The mist makes you feel a chilly hand on your back you turn around and see , the Ice queen, she grabs you, takes you to her frosty palace and she is about to lock you in a freezing cold room. Then you wake up in your bedroom and find out it is all a dream. You look out the window and see the snow has melted and you can see the lush green grass again but you can still hear the faint screams of pain and agony and you think of the Ice queen from your dream.

February 15, 2013
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Janet and the Tree House

A little girl called Janet lived in a tiny house in the middle of the dark, lonely woods. The tiny house was a tree house with a red tiled roof. Janet lived with her auntie Amanda, her mother and father went away to a small island of the coast off Africa and couldn’t take Janet with them. When Janet woke up and looked out the window she saw a flock of geese flying strong over the tree tops. Amanda came in to say that they would have to move to Africa where Janet’s mum and dad was living because the electricity bill had gone soaring up and she couldn’t afford it. They packed their belongings and got in the creaky wagon. The wagon was very dark so Janet could sleep in it. She grabbed her rag doll that her auntie made for her and went to sleep again. When they got to the lazy sea they boarded a snug boat and they sailed off. After a 24 hour journey they got to the Africa. Africa was so hot that they had to put there t-shirts on! “I can’t wait to see mum and dad!” exclaimed Janet. “I have hardly seen them!” When they got to the huge house Janet’s parents stayed at, they unloaded the wagon and knocked on the creaky door. Nobody answered; they knocked again still nobody answered. “What are we meant to do now?” asked Janet. “I have no idea!” said Amanda. “We will just have to sleep in the wild!”

February 15, 2013
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The Little Cottage Story Starter

The lonely little old lady in the small cottage heard a ringing of her door bell, so she went to the door to answer it. There was a surprise waiting for her when she opened the door there standing in front of her was a very fat man with a kind of red skin. She stood still as a statue. He went through the door and helped himself to a club chocolate biscuit. The old lady was very mad, one because he had gone with all her clubs and two his mucky boots had left a trail of mud and she didn’t like to clean as her back got awfully sore. He sat by the fire and the old lady was really mad by this point so she roared WHAT ARE YOU DOING IN MY LITTLE HOME! He gently said I am here to visit you, I am your son remember me, Jamie. Ohhhh I remember now! You’re late, like two years late. Ok…Ok mum. So how’s things with your brothers? Oh ok except Ben is a bit ill at the moment.

Oh that’s not good. Ah I remember young Benjamin. There was a scream AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.

February 15, 2013
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Limbobo

Limbobo the Lion

Limbobo is golden. He is very cute and fury. He is playful. He is the lion kings son. When he goes out to play he is full of energy. He is very, very fierce. He is quite little. He blends in with the sand. He is very alert. But most of all he loves his family.