Burravoe Primary School

Bradley P3 100wc

| 9 Comments

There was a bit of chocolate cake left on the plate. The cake got eaten by someone into the shape of a head. The crumbs turned into eyes and a mouth. The cake stared at me, he walked over to me. It talked to me it said you can walk with me if you want. I said yes and I was very happy. We were best friends. We went to the kitchen. The cake said can we have coloured lollipops? The boy said no we don’t have any left. We have to wait until Mum gets back. We were happy.


9 Comments

  1. HELLO BRADELEY
    WOW YOUR CHOCOLATE RESIPE SOUNDS VERY GOOD
    COOL YUM
    I LOVE CHOCOLATE

    LOVE πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€
    RADHA FROM MR SMITHS CLASS πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€

  2. HELLO BRADLEY:D πŸ˜€

    I REALLY LOVED YOUR POST BECAUSE I LOVE CHOCOLATE:D πŸ˜€

    AND I ALSO LOVE COLERD LOLLIPOPS:D πŸ˜€ SO ALL THE BEST WITH YOR STORY!!!

    LOVE,

    PARTHAVI FROM MR.SMITHS CLASS:D πŸ˜€

  3. HELLO BRADELEY
    WOW YOUR CHOCOLATE RESIPE SOUNDS VERY GOOD
    COOL

    LOVE πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€
    RADHA FROM MR SMITHS CLASS πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€

  4. dear bradley

    it was A really funny story.but how could cakes have eyes. awesome story.

  5. HELLO BRADELEY
    WOW YOUR CHOCOLATE RESIPE SOUNDS VERY GOOD
    KEEP IT UP

    LOVE πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€
    RADHA FROM MR SMITHS CLASS πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€

  6. Dear Bradley,
    I liked how you ended with a positive feeling and not with a negative feeling because I like the stories that end with a happy feeling because it puts a smile on my face ; ].
    I also liked how you used your creativity of making a fictional story.
    How did you come up with this idea?
    Did you want to write a fictional story?
    Keep up the good work!

    Sincerely,
    Bhadra

  7. Dear Bradley,
    I really liked your story.
    Did you really use 100 words?!
    Was it really hard to make a story out of 100 words.
    I’m sure it would have been hard for me to write the story,then count the words and add some things.
    Keep up the good work!

    Sincerely,
    Elysia (Mr. Smiths Class)

  8. Dear Bradley that was a awesome story! It’s kinda creepy how the cake had eyes and a mouth, but it wanted to be your friend. Did you tell your mom? Did she know about it?

    Please write back AJ

  9. Hello Bradley!
    Im Cecilia (america)
    Your Chocolate Cake sounded very sweet
    You added a lot of detail to show you were happy with the cake
    Nice Post!
    Keep up the good work & write more posts! πŸ˜€ πŸ™‚

    Cecilia

Leave a Reply

Required fields are marked *.


This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.

Report a Glow concern  Cookie policy  Privacy policy

Glow Blogs uses cookies to enhance your experience on our service. By using this service or closing this message you consent to our use of those cookies. Please read our Cookie Policy.

Close