There was a bit of chocolate cake left on the plate. The cake got eaten by someone into the shape of a head. The crumbs turned into eyes and a mouth. The cake stared at me, he walked over to me. It talked to me it said you can walk with me if you want. I said yes and I was very happy. We were best friends. We went to the kitchen. The cake said can we have coloured lollipops? The boy said no we don’t have any left. We have to wait until Mum gets back. We were happy.
Bradley P3 100wc
November 20, 2012 | 9 Comments
November 20, 2012 at 2:37 pm
HELLO BRADELEY
WOW YOUR CHOCOLATE RESIPE SOUNDS VERY GOOD
COOL YUM
I LOVE CHOCOLATE
LOVE 😀 😀
RADHA FROM MR SMITHS CLASS 😀 😀 😀
November 20, 2012 at 2:36 pm
HELLO BRADLEY:D 😀
I REALLY LOVED YOUR POST BECAUSE I LOVE CHOCOLATE:D 😀
AND I ALSO LOVE COLERD LOLLIPOPS:D 😀 SO ALL THE BEST WITH YOR STORY!!!
LOVE,
PARTHAVI FROM MR.SMITHS CLASS:D 😀
November 20, 2012 at 2:34 pm
HELLO BRADELEY
WOW YOUR CHOCOLATE RESIPE SOUNDS VERY GOOD
COOL
LOVE 😀 😀
RADHA FROM MR SMITHS CLASS 😀 😀 😀
November 20, 2012 at 2:34 pm
dear bradley
it was A really funny story.but how could cakes have eyes. awesome story.
November 20, 2012 at 2:32 pm
HELLO BRADELEY
WOW YOUR CHOCOLATE RESIPE SOUNDS VERY GOOD
KEEP IT UP
LOVE 😀 😀
RADHA FROM MR SMITHS CLASS 😀 😀 😀
November 20, 2012 at 2:31 pm
Dear Bradley,
I liked how you ended with a positive feeling and not with a negative feeling because I like the stories that end with a happy feeling because it puts a smile on my face ; ].
I also liked how you used your creativity of making a fictional story.
How did you come up with this idea?
Did you want to write a fictional story?
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Bhadra
November 20, 2012 at 2:25 pm
Dear Bradley,
I really liked your story.
Did you really use 100 words?!
Was it really hard to make a story out of 100 words.
I’m sure it would have been hard for me to write the story,then count the words and add some things.
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Elysia (Mr. Smiths Class)
November 20, 2012 at 2:20 pm
Dear Bradley that was a awesome story! It’s kinda creepy how the cake had eyes and a mouth, but it wanted to be your friend. Did you tell your mom? Did she know about it?
Please write back AJ
November 20, 2012 at 2:19 pm
Hello Bradley!
Im Cecilia (america)
Your Chocolate Cake sounded very sweet
You added a lot of detail to show you were happy with the cake
Nice Post!
Keep up the good work & write more posts! 😀 🙂
Cecilia