Burravoe Primary School

Melissa’s 100wc

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In the night I walked down stairs and I opened the fridge, I ate the yummy  chocolate inside.  I went back in bed. In the morning mum said where’s the chocolate? Look there’s a lot of crumbs on the plate. Who was it? said mum. Was it you Melissa? It wasn’t me. Ok said mum. Leah did you ate the chocolate? I asked. The next night I walked down stairs then I said dad why are you eating the chocolate? The next morning mum said who ate the chocolate again? I know who ate the chocolate it’s dad, laughed Melissa.


8 Comments

  1. Brilliant Melissa!!!!!!!!!

  2. Dear Melissa,

    Great story. 🙂 I like how you used the chocolate theme, I think it goes very well. Great job Melissa I counted the words and you have exactly 100 words and you have got heaps of puncuation and there is no spelling mistakes! so there is nothing that I can see that is wrong! 🙂 So thankyou for sharing your work with me Melissa.

    from Lili 🙂

  3. I like this Melissa it was funny and really good can not wait to see your next one .

  4. Hi Melissa good writing
    What year are you in?
    Do you enjoy writing I do

    Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Melissa!!

  5. YOUR DAD ATE THE CAKE HOW FUNNY!!!! 😀
    HE WOULD EATEN SUCH A BIG CAKE
    DID HE?
    WELL AWESOME POST I REALLY LIKED YOURS!
    KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
    TELL ME MORE ABOUT YOUR STORY

    SO LONG!

    CECILIA

  6. Dear Melissa,

    Great story!
    I love chocolate!
    Is that exactly 100 words?
    I look forward to reading your next story!

    Sincerely,
    Edward

  7. Dear Melissa,
    Awesome Post!
    Does your dad like chocolate?
    I do not like sweets but my brother loves chocolate!
    Do you like chocolate?

    Sincerely,
    Elysia

  8. Great story, keep up the good work and look forword to reading your next story.

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