Burravoe Primary School

Melissa’s Story

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It was New Year’s Day everyone was celebrating  New Year’s Day. We went outside to see the fireworks it was beautiful colors. There were two boys called John and Jo. John and Jo’s family was going out on New Year’s Day visiting. John and Jo’s, family went to John and Jo’s friend’s house. John and Jo’s friend called Frank. John said to Frank it was a new start for us. How I cope with a broken leg said Jo. Where your wheelchair is said Mum and Dad It’s in the passage way said Jo happily. They said goodbye to Frank. They went home and they watched TV programs.


5 Comments

  1. I really enjoyed your story. It was very entertaining and I like how you used a special day.

    Alyssa, from Texas

  2. I liked your story, but I think you repeated yourself too much. Like when you said John and Jo, John and Jo.Overall you did quite great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Jennabelle from Texas

  3. Dear Melissa,
    I love your story! What gave you the idea to write this story?
    From
    Charlotte P

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