Looking behind me I saw a scary big hedgehog and it was black and hedgehog at the garden and he was eating grass and he was called Blackie and he loves eating grass and rushed outside he was gone and when I rushed back to my bed room and I got him outside and I looked all the doors and windows and he was gone. The next morning they where another one and he was a baby one and he was in the garden and he was running about and he was tiny and he rushed to his house and he was in his house.
Leah’s 100 word challenge
September 25, 2012 | 3 Comments
September 25, 2012 at 7:25 pm
Great story Leah! But you might want to changed looked to locked to make senesce!
Hope that helps!
From Charlotte
September 25, 2012 at 7:13 pm
That is a scary hedgehog! Try starting a new sentence instead of using ‘and’ . That would make it much easier to read. You have a great imagination.
September 25, 2012 at 6:39 pm
Your story was great because of the hedgehog. We liked the name Blackie and that there was a baby.
Maybe you could add some puncuation and check for missing words. Otherwise you did amazing.
4th grade from Texas