Pandi the Brave

Written by Nathene Arnaoutis

Illustrated by Sarah Adams

Pupils in P2-6 listened to the story of Pandi the Brave. In groups of 3, they wrote a description of the beginning, middle and end of the story. All groups then peer assessed each other’s work. They then added their group opinions of the story at the end.

Pandi the Brave

Pandi was very helpful except he was scared of the dark, but he could speek to the monkeys in the trees.  His dad was the chief of the tribe. His 3 brothers Jobee, Shaka and Cetswayo were inthe tribe too. All Pandi wanted was to be in the tribe with his leopard skin and spear. Every day he went to the cows in the field. One of the cows was smaller than all the rest and that one was Pandi’s favourite.

By Mia, Phoebe and Abby

Well done on your work. HS MA KB

I would like to have seen a little information at the beginning on where the story is set. Miss A.

Pandi goes to bed, he can’t get to sleep because there is a horrible cold storm, in the distance he could hear a faint sound coming from the outside, He could here Tugela and she was crying for help, Pandi tried to block out the sound but he couldn’t the more he heard it he knew he would have to go out.

He ran looking for Tugela, he could hear faint cackling sound in the distance. But the cackling noise was coming from the wolfs, he ran on he found Tugela,

Tugela was trapped under a rock. Pandi ran to get his father and brothers. They carried Tugela home.

We had to change the font to read it. We all like the rest of it though. PS if you want to change the font back then you can. By Mia, Phoebe and Abby

You describe the middle of the story in detail.

I think there are a number of commas in the first paragraph which should have been full stops. Miss A.

When he wakes up in the morning his mum and dad are at his bed side they prestened him with a leopard skin and spear. Then his brothers gave him gifts Jobee gave him a mouse ,Shaka gave him a catapult and Cetswayo gave him a whistle . He was happy he put on his leopard skin and grabbed his spear and ran out side and  danced in the sun .

Check your spelling mistakes, good ending but you might want to add missing words to the presents. CP, BC and LA

I agree with CP, BC and LA that it is important to check your spelling. I think this is a detailed description of the end of the story. Miss A.

Group opinions of story

‘Excellent story and pictures. Very beautiful’

Honor (7), Kerry (7) and Melissa (9)

‘Cool story, awesome pictures, catches people’s attention’

Charlotte (10), Bradley (7) and Leah (9)

‘We love the story, beautiful illustrations’.

Mia (9), Abby (6) and Phoebe (7)

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