Looking behind me I saw a zombie. I tried to get out but there were zombies left and right and in front of me. What could I do? I said to my self. AAA!!! With my phone I called my dad and Duncan but the zombies took it and broke it. I started to scream. Help help I shouted. After 2 hours I touched one of the zombies- it felt weird. I saw somebody looking like my dad. I pulled the zombies hair and it was a mask! My dad and Duncan were being zombies. After that we went for supper at pizza hut.
Dear Erin,
I love zombies so I really enjoyed your story. It started off very scary and ended with a very Scooby Doo like finale.
Asking a question in the middle is a very good example of language style; very impressive.
Also, finishing at Pizza Hut is brilliant as I love Pizza.
Well done.
Mr Foster – Shrewsbury International School Bangkok
Dear Erin, some of us like reading about zombies and have a book called Zombie Chasers. Have you read this book? You’re a very good writer!
Hi Erin. great story.